Shield & Crocus — MASSIVE EDIT edition

After some very constructive comments in a revise-and-resubmit agent rejection, I’ve started a gigantic thorough revision of Shield & Crocus.

Objectives of MASSIVE EDIT:

1) Re-write all 1st person present chapters into 3rd person past tense.  Yikes.
2) Re-write all 3rd person present chapters  into 3rd person past tense.  Not as bad.
3) Focus on characterization, drawing out the POV character’s thoughts and distinguishing them from the more neutral narration/description
4) Punch up the pacing whenever needed, cutting material that doesn’t both move the plot forward and advance character.
5) If possible, add 5-10K words of enriching description and monologue.  This will take the manuscript from 90K to 95 or 100K, which are happier wordcount points for trying to sell the novel.  I’ve already written at least 8K of new material, but I’ve cut about 4K of weaker scenes as well.

I’m 338 pages in, with the document currently standing at 446 pages and 94.5K words.  I hope to be done with the full re-write by the end of this month.  My awesome girlfriend Meg has been my first reader for this re-write, and her input is fantastic.  I hope to get a couple of writer friends to read it between now and mid-October so I can make any needed tweaks on pacing or characterization to help it break through for readers.

Ultimately, I want it to be shiny and fully awesomeified by the time I attend the World Fantasy Convention in San Diego at the end of October.  That way, I can talk it up to editors and agents when appropriate.

Musical inspiration for the MASSIVE EDIT brought to me by the album “Invincible” by Two Steps From Hell, the soundtrack to the video game Bastion by Darren Korb, and Jonathan Coulton’s new album, “Artificial Heart.”

Write-a-Thon Report: Week Two

My first Write-a-Thon story is done, with a bit over a day to spare. “Can You Tell Me How to Get…” ended up clocking in at 5,600 words, more than expected or intended.

I’m still not very good at writing shorter stories. I will see about getting either tale #2 or #3 to be under 4K (many venues like stories under four thousand words, including some notable semi-pro and a few pro markets).

It will need a lot of revision, but it’s done. This is actually the first short story I’ve finished since Clarion West, since I’ve been focusing on novels. Two more to go!

‘A New Generation of Rep Groups’ at PW

I’m quoted in a story at Publisher’s Weekly — talking about being a second-generation bookseller (I’m at the end of the story).  It’s interesting for me to see what quotes and topics were chosen out of an hour-long interview.  It was a fun process, and of course my grand ambitions are to be quoted there many times in my life, including more as a writer.

http://www.publishersweekly.com/pw/by-topic/industry-news/bookselling/article/47745-a-new-generation-of-rep-groups-.html

 

I haven’t seen the print version yet, so I’ll keep an eye out for that during my travels this week.

The Win of Indies and Paid Author Events

I have the privilege of working with several dozen of the Midwest’s finest independent bookstores, and in the two+ years I’ve been repping, I’ve seen a number of habits that these indies are using to hold on and serve their communities while Amazon.com gobbles up more of the market, while eReaders go mainstream, and while the big chains go through their own drama.

Here are some of the most important things that good indies do right (IMHO):

The Personal Touch — I have booksellers who know all of their regular customers by name, with personal relationships and investment in the customers’ lives.  When I go in to sell my new lines, these booksellers already have buyers in mind for books as they order them from me, maintaining a strong revenue stream by offering A+ customer service, acting as personal reading consultants to these avid readers.  That high level of handselling mastery and individualized service is something that, I think, simply cannot and probably will not ever be really matchable by digital bookselling.  Even if you have a relationship with a bookseller or blogger online, the in-person ongoing connection, with the bookseller-customer relationship growing into a friendship performed through direct interaction is a singular and marvelous thing.

The Thirdplace Effect — Digital bookstores are space-agnostic — they exist everywhere with an active internet connection, but they don’t have their own cafes, they don’t have cozy chairs or connections to a  local theatre to host a large author event.  Some of my best bookstores are also some of the best community centers, drawing people for the environment they create and maintain — often with a cafe, and always including great partnerships with local organizations, local authors, book clubs and book groups.  As a teen, my after-school hangout was a game store (The Game Preserve in Bloomington, IN), and much of why I loved that store was the way that it served as a community center for geeks of Bloomington.  Bookstores do that for readers, writers, and other groups.  Online relationships can be strong, but for me, online interaction with friends is just a hold-me-over until I get to see them next in person.

Giving Back — Indies make jobs locally, spend their money locally, and are invested in helping other local businesses.  Not that chain stores aren’t invested in local business, but in my experience, my indie booksellers are deeply invested in their local business bureaus, independent retailer organizations, philanthropic groups, and more.  When nearly all places online are one place, the preservation of the local is something that many people are re-discovering — trying to preserve and support local identity and local culture.

 

So when I see people complaining about independent bookstores charging for author events (http://www.edrants.com/paid-author-events-the-future-of-independent-bookstores/), I ask readers to remember everything indies do for the community, and that the real price for a bookstore to run an event is very high.  In times where many booksellers are overworked and fighting to keep the lights on, I’m happy to buy an author’s book to get into a signing/reading, or to pay a cover to give back a little to the store so they can keep hosting awesome authors and being community centers.

What if you already have the book they want you to buy?  Give it to a friend and share the awesome.  Especially since you can probably get that book signed and personalized to the friend, making it a fantastic gift.

 

Ok, that’ll do for now.

*Steps off of Indie Bookstore Cheerleader Soapbox*

Write-a-Thon Week One

As I previously mentioned, I’m participating in the Clarion West Write-a-Thon, which runs concurrently with the 2011 workshop in Seattle.

My first story for the Write-a-Thon is “Can You Tell Me How To Get…”, a post-apocalyptic cyberpunk muppet story.  Yeah, that’s right: muppets.

We’ve hit our participant goal, now we’re looking for sponsors to support one or more writers while we toil away for the next six weeks, sculpting awesome out of pure nothing, fueled by caffeine, madness, and whatever other sins the various writers use for inspiration.

Here’s a short teaser from the story-in-progress:

“Can you tell me how to get to Paprika Place?” Charlie would ask.  The ones that remembered him from their TV days would shake their heads politely.  They’d been viewers once, tuning in every afternoon to learn their letters and numbers.  The younger ones, or the ones whose parents had worked for The Mouse or CapeCo, who’d been forbidden to watch Bunco’s shows, they would just recoil from Fluffasaurus and run back to their houses.  Then the guards would come in their sharp black suits and sunglasses and ask him to move along.

Remember kids, don’t talk to strangers!

Clarion West Write-a-Thon

I attended Clarion West in 2007 and it was a fantastic, transformative experience.  Those six weeks constituted a quantum leap forward in my writing skills and the work started there continues to bear fruit years later.

And so, when the Write-a-Thon comes along, I feel very strongly about participating.

But what’s a Write-a-Thon?  Simply, it’s similar to any other Thing-a-Thon (Walk-a-Thon, Dance-a-Thon, Pankration-a-Thon), where participants will ask for sponsors, and pledge do so some thing.  In this case, I’m pledging to write three new short stories during the six-week Write-a-Thon, and I’m looking to collect pledges which will go directly to support the Clarion West Foundation to provide scholarships to writers and to fund the workshop.

My participant page is up at the Clarion West Site: http://clarionwest.net/events/writeathon/MikeUnderwood

So if you are willing and able, I’d love if you could sponsor me for the Write-a-Thon, or sponsor any of the other awesome writers who are participating: http://clarionwest.net/events_page/write_a_thon#wat-list

I’ll be posting updates about my writing progress here, so you’ll be able to follow my trials and tribulations, trying to produce awesome fiction while traveling around the Midwest selling books.

Reviews: Napier’s Bones and Among Thieves

I’ve been trying to read more this year, and my luck has been excellent (mostly due to the fact that I read things that come highly recommended or are written by friends).

So here are two short reviews of books I’ve read in the last couple of weeks:

Napier’s Bones by Derryl Murphy (ChiZine Press) — ISBN 9781926851099

This is a recent contemporary spec fic novel from Chizine, one of the publishers I represent (through Diamond).  It’s a weird, awesome urban fantasy kind of book where Math is magic.  A select number of people called Numerates can see and manipulate the numbers inherent in all things, traveling around the world to collect number-powered artifacts called Mojo.  Dom and Jenna, along with a Numerate ghost named Billy get swept up in a plot by a long-dead Numerate, and fight their way across three countries and two continents to prevent the ghosts of long-dead Numerates from seizing an artifact that would let them re-define reality itself.

I wasn’t expecting this book to fly like it does.  The pacing is fantastic, and made it a great book to read during plane travel.  The characters are decently defined, if not remarkable.  Strong plotting covers up many things, and I found myself happy to follow the leads through their weird Donald in Mathmagicland-esque adventures and throwing number blasts.  I was reminded of the tabletop RPG Unknown Armies, except the setting wasn’t as bleak.

 

Among Thieves: A Tale of the Kin by Douglas Hulick (Roc) — 9780451463906

Doug Hulick is a friend I met through the SCA, and his historical knowledge is put to amazing use in this premiere.  If you are a fan of Joe Abercrombie’s gritty fantasies or Scott Lynch’s Gentlemen Bastards books, you should definitely check out Doug’s premiere.  Among Thieves is the story of Drothe, a thief who works as a Nose, keeping tabs on other thieves (aka ‘The Kin’) and reporting to his boss.  Drothe is a sharp, morally grey character (grey at best.  He is not a good person, though he does have his own sense of honor, to his fellow Kin), but is very compelling and sufficiently sympathetic to make me happy to spend a book with him.

Drothe finds himself in possession of an artifact that if used by the wrong people, could swing the balance of power or even destroy the empire which his home city of Ildrecca is a member.  All Drothe wants to do is keep from getting shanked by the various factions maneuvering to obtain the book — either to destroy the book or use it to take power for themselves.

The two most notable strengths of this book for me are the thieves’ cant and the fight scenes.  Doug started Among Thieves after picking up an encyclopedia of thieves’ cant, and the love of language is evident throughout the book.  As the story moves along, Among Thieves masterfully enculturates the reader into Drothe’s version of the thieves’ cant, with shorthand, slang, and stock phrases.  By the end of the book, a reader can happily parse a whole paragraph where most all of the verbs and nouns are in the cant rather than the common tongue used by non-Kin.

And the fight scenes, oh the fight scenes.  Doug has studied renaissance martial arts extensively, and that knowledge grants his fight scenes a great sense of self-confidence and clarity.  The blocking and choreography of the fights in Among Thieves is some of the best I’ve read in years.

If you are looking for a fantasy romp with backstabbing, sneaking, rumor-mongering and a deadly game of ‘Where’s the McGuffin,’ give this book a try.

 

More reviews later if I have the time.  Right now I’m super-excited to start reading China Mieville’s Embassytown.

One Week With My HTC Flyer

I’d been nibbling around the edges of the tablet world since late last year, trying to figure out when to get one, what to get, whether it’d be good to buy now or if I should wait…all of that.

While I have an iPhone and it works great, I’ve been less and less happy about Apple’s behavior with regards to their mobile devices and app store.  They’ve engaged in a fair bit of censorship, are trying to restrict third party’s ability to conduct commerce inside of apps used on their devices, and are very very protectionist of their devices, with crazy EULAs and such things.  They’re protecting their very valuable IPs, and trying make money, which is fine.  But I decided that if I could get a tablet and have it not be an iPad, while still doing the things I wanted it to, I’d be happy.

Here’s what I wanted out of a tablet:

  • Something that can play audio and video, with good playlist and sorting
  • Access to the burgeoning tablet/touchscreen video game market (as a player)
  • eBook reading capability (with a bigger screen than my little iPhone).
  • A larger storage capacity, so I could shift much of the mobile music burden from my phone (which burns down its battery very fast).
  • Something sturdy — since I travel a lot and can be rough on my tech.
  • A device that would work with a stylus, especially as handwriting recognition tech increases.
  • It must look cool and have an intuitive GUI, while still leaving me with a lot of control over the device.
I did a fair amount of scouting, looking at the iPad 2, the Motorola Xoom, as well as previews of the HP TouchPad and this thing called the HTC Flyer.  HTC’s reputation is mostly as a smartphone company, but their proprietary GUI (Graphic User Interfase) is very cool, and I saw that a WiFi 7″ tablet with stylus add-on was coming from Best Buy.
I picked mine up in NYC a little over a week ago, and am only now getting it into fighting shape, since I’ve been on the road since the 20th and hadn’t been able to spend serious time getting a handle on how best to use the Flyer.
First Impressions:
  • The real price of the Flyer is $580, because the stylus was broken out into an accessory.  This let Best Buy advertise the device at $500, when it really needs the stylus to do all of what it can do.  Kind of annoying, but that’s something to blame on Best Buy, not HTC.
  • The Flyer has a good heft to it, and feels fairly sturdy.
  • I’m still getting used to the HTC Sense version of Android, but it makes a bit more sense every day.  I have a lot more control and fiddly power with this than I would with an iPad.  And I like to fiddle.
  • AirSync and DoubleTwist are brilliant.
  • The crucial feature that makes the Flyer a great work asset is the fact that I can use the stylus to ‘write’ in my publishers’ catalog pdfs or order sheets, and save them/send them to myself.  This should be huge, and save a lot of paper.
  • I screwed up applying the ZAGG shield, and now I have to figure out if there’s a way to salvage it (there is dirt on the sticky side, so all sorts of flecks show on the screen) or if I just need to buy another one and get it professionally installed (which would be annoying, and waste the $$ I spent on the first shield).
  • My hope is that having the Flyer will let me drain my phone battery much less frequently when on the road, so I don’t have to re-charge while driving or risk shutdown.
  • More to come as I learn the ropes of this nifty, vote-my-politics-with-my-money device.

WisCon — Changing Science Fiction With Bake Sales

This weekend, I became a member of the Secret Feminist Cabal, with insidious plans to take over the world and indoctrinate the masses…with Feminism.

I’d been hearing about the awesomeness of WisCon for years, from writer friends, scholar friends, and complete strangers.  I intended to go last year, but plans fell through.

This year, I made it a priority and finally reached the nerdy casual halls of the Concourse Hotel and Governor’s Club in Madison, WI.  I flew directly from having been in NYC for a week (working, including BEA), so I had a wicked-overpacked bag.  We had a six-hour delay getting out of LaGuardia, and I was very happy to have my various gadgets and some books on hand for distraction.

I could spend quite a long time talking about how awesome WisCon is, but I think I will start with a bullet point approach.

  • Starting off the convention with a writing workshop, getting great feedback on the opening of Shield & Crocus.
  • Getting to see friends from far away, catching up with @Teleidoplex, @futuransky, @DougHulick, @CassieY4, @creature57, @rachelswirsky and many others
  • A convention where the default level of discourse is high enough that when I ramble about the ideological implications of semiotic paradigms, people nod instead of making confused or annoyed faces
  • Bake Sales for Activism
  • A riotous auction filled with communitas
  • Great readings from brilliant writers.
  • Meeting several of my authors (for Night Shade Books and Prime Books)
  • Acquiring several books and only having to pay for two.
  • Discovering delicious food in downtown Madison, from tapas to pizza to Himalayan food
  • My awesome roommates @Keffy and EJ — we all worked excellently together and helped me have a Con Posse despite never having been to WisCon
  • Rar and Squee in various amounts across the weekend, with cutting critiques and effusive praise
WisCon has been going on for thirty-five years, and as such, has an incredible amount of history, in-jokes, and a lovingly-curated feel of inclusiveness, plurality of voice and perspective.  Unlike pretty much any other convention I’ve ever been to, the gender balance was possibly up to 2:1 women:men — making for a very different feel.
I’m excited to attend again next year, and I’d love to be able to do a reading (especially if I have more sales by then).  I think WisCon and World Fantasy are a great pairing of conventions for me, one more formal and ‘professional’, the other more informal and more academic.  If possible, I’d like to hit even more conventions, but that will come down to budgeting and time negotiation between the SCA and writing conventions.
Next post:  Week One with my HTC Flyer.

Re-Launch — Now “Geek Theory”

I’ve decided to re-vise, re-name, and re-launch this blog as “Geek Theory.”

Since I’ve been focusing more on my fiction and my ambitions as a writer of speculative fiction, I’m re-branding this WordPress blog as my personal-professional blog, talking about writing, my life as an independent publishers’ book rep, and other fun things.  There will be far fewer reviews and essays, and they’ll be in a more personal tone, rather than my pop-academic tone from before.

First up — a summary post on the awesome that was WisCon 35.